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draft-ietf-opsawg-9092-update.xml

@@ -136,7 +136,8 @@
             remarks: attribute and a geofeed: attribute.
           </li>
 	  <li>
-	    Rewrite Authentication section to be more formal.
+	    Rewrite Authentication <xref target="auth"/> to be more
+	    formal.
 	  </li>
           <li>
             Geofeed file only UTF-8 CSV.
@@ -341,8 +342,8 @@
       </t>
 
       <t>
-        Historically, before geofeed files, this was done in varied
+        Historically, before <xref target="RFC9092"/>, this was done in
-        ways, at the discretion of the implementer, often without
+        varied ways, at the discretion of the implementer, often without
         consistent authentication, where data were mostly imported from
         email without formal authorisation or validation.
       </t>
@@ -350,9 +351,9 @@
       <t>
         To minimize the load on RIRs' WHOIS <xref target="RFC3912"/>
         services, the RIR's FTP <xref target="RFC0959"/> services SHOULD
-        be used for large-scale access to gather geofeed URLs.  This
+        be used for large-scale access to gather inetnum:s with geofeed
-        uses efficient bulk access instead of fetching via brute-force
+        references.  This uses efficient bulk access instead of fetching
-        search through the IP space.
+        via brute-force search through the IP space.
       </t>
 
       <t>
@@ -678,12 +679,13 @@
       </t>
 
       <t>
-        Harvesting and publishing aggregated geofeed data outside of
+        Harvesting and publishing aggregated geofeed data outside of the
-        the RPSL model should be avoided as it can have the effect
+        RPSL model should be avoided as it can have the effect that more
-        that more specifics from one aggregatee could undesirably
+        specifics from one aggregatee could undesirably affect the less
-        affect the less specifics of a different aggregatee.  The
+        specifics of a different aggregatee.  Moreover, publishing
-        validation model in Section <xref target="auth"/> handles this
+        aggregated geofeed data prevents the reader of the data to
-        issue within the RPSL model.
+        perform the checks described in <xref target="fetch"/> and <xref
+        target="auth"/>.
       </t>
       <t>
         Currently, geolocation providers have bulk WHOIS data access at